Beta-Read Fellow Tetrapod?

a request

The speculative-evolution-and-cookery scifi serial novel Fellow Tetrapod is about to undergo one more revision before I publish it, and I could really use some advice on it. How can I tighten the beginning? How can I develop the romantic sub-plot? Are there missing commas? If you have time before the middle of January, I would love to hear what you think.

To read it, you can find it on Royal Road or you can contact me and I'll send you the pdf

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Thank you, and merry Christmas,

Dan